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Write a letter to your colleague asking for help in setting up equipment for your presentation. In your letter, you should- -tell when and where presentation will take place -describe your arrangements -tell him/her what equipment you need

Dear Tom white, I am preparing for an important
presentation
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 scheduled on June 15,2024 at 11:30 am in the morning. I am writing to request
you
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for
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your assistance in
equipment
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the equipment
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 set-up process for
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presentation
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. The
presentation
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 is planned to take place in
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conference room number 152 in our office building.All the managers and board members are supposed to attend
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 meeting as it is crucial to discuss the quarter-end profit and loss figures to improve
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 of
next
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the next
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 quarter. I would be in
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need of a projector which needs to be properly connected to my laptop for
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the seemless
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seemless
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seamless
 delivery of my work. To provide better insights, an audio system is required since my
presentation
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 has a lot of audio files .
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 that, I want to use a microphone so that my voice is audible to the audience present in the hall.
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, If we can arrange a clicker to advance my slides, it would enhance the visual experience of the viewers. To make the whole
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setup
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 work properly, I need a person who is well-versed
with
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 the technicalities of
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 process and your expertise in
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 field would be really helpful. So, I would really appreciate
if
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 you
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 spare some time and come half an hour early
at
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 the conference room. Please let me know if
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 schedule works for you or
you
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if you
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 need anything else from my side to make
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set up
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 process smoother. yours sincerely, Shaffy

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider separating your ideas more distinctly into paragraphs to enhance readability. For instance, you can have one paragraph for the description of the presentation, another for the equipment needed, and another for requesting Tom's help.
Task Achievement
Ensure to review for minor grammatical errors such as spaces after commas (e.g., June 15,2024 should be June 15, 2024). This can help in making the text appear more polished and professional.
Task Achievement
The letter covers all required bullet points in a clear and precise manner, which is great for task achievement.
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The tone is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for making a request to a colleague.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, which provides a professional touch.
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