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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does the situation have more advantages or more disadvantages.

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In my opinion, I think that having long
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 hours and leaving extremely minimal
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 for leisure activities has more disadvantages than
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benefits it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of working long hours with very little
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 for relaxation.
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, individuals who spend more
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 working are able to get do more
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 in terms of productivity in a short period of
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.
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 means since they stay longer at
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 they will not need to carryover duties from the previous day into the next.
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, they are able to prove and show their superiors how dedicated and passionate they are to the job and getting the
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 done.
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, despite the advantages, I believe people who spend more
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 working with little
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 for leisure activities have more challenges. In so many cases from various experiences with people, they end up not having
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 for their family to bond and be there when they are needed. Another issue is persons who
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 long hours end up getting fatigued
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 of a lack of adequate periods to rest and relax both the body and mind to help calm the nerves.
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 is a concern as only an individual who takes a break from
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 can always feel refreshed to take on even more
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 and have a vibrant positive energy in the workplace. In conclusion, I believe there are more challenges with working for a longer period with minimal
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 to relax as people who do end up not having
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 for family, are always cranky and are not always extremely active.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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