the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram illustrates the process of producing sugar from its plant in different stages.
According to
the diagram, the process starts by growing sugar cane which takes approximately 12 to 18 months to rip. After that, the yield is harvested in two different ways, either by farmers or by machines like tractors.Linking Words
Then
, the harvested cane goes through the mill to be crushed and make juice.
In the next step, the juice runs through the limestone filter to be purified.Linking Words
Next,
the purified juice goes to the evaporator to become more concentrated. Linking Words
As a result
, the syrup that was made in the previous stage pass through a centrifuge Linking Words
due to
separate the sugar crystal from the syrup.Linking Words
Finally
, crystals are kept in a reservoir to become dry and cool,so it is ready to sell.
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Overall
, there are seven steps to making a final product that clients can purchase it.Linking Words
Moreover
,the first three steps dedicate to preparing the raw material and the remaining stages show machinery steps.Linking Words
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