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e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The given table presents how the police budget was funded in 2017 and in 2018
while
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 the charts indicate how those funds were allocated.
Firstly
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,
it is clear that
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 the total budget rosed from 304,7
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 to 318.6
million
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pounds
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 in 2018. The primary source for both years was the national government which offered 175.5
million
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pounds
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 in 2017
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 there was a slight increase in 2018 up to 177.8
million
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pounds
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.
According to
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 the table, the contribution of local taxes soared from 81,2
million
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pounds
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 to 102.3
million
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pounds
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. Other sources
such
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 as grabs stayed almost unchanged with a small rise from 38
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 to 38.5
million
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pounds
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 the next year. When it comes to the distribution of the funds the biggest expenditure by far in both years was officers' and staff salaries that were declined from 75% to 69%. On the contrary technology funding almost doubled from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.
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, the spending on buildings and transport stayed unaltered constituting 17 % of the budget allocation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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