The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of spending money on households in
Japan
and
Malaysia
in the year 2010.
Overall
, housing, food and other goods and services were the 3 largest spent in
Malaysia
and
Japan
;
however
, the least spending was on health care in both countries.
Otherwise
, the percentage of transport and health care doubled between
Malaysia
and
Japan
. In
Malaysia
, the percentage of accommodation accounted for 34%, which was the highest spending of the total expense.
This
figure was higher compared to
Japan
which was 27% spent on the dwelling. For other goods and services, Japanese citizens paid 29% which is 3% higher than Malaysians spent on
this
item. Relating to food, the figures for both
Malaysia
and
Japan
were almost identical, at 27% and 24% respectively.
On the other hand
, Malaysians spent 3% on health care and 10% on transport,
while
the Japanese spent double their income on these items.
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