Many people nowadays decide not to work for a large company but to become self-employed. What problems might this decision cause? What can they do to solve these problems?

Nowadays, people became hiring
themselfs
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themselves
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and
do
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their own
buisness
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business
independentaly
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independently
rather than belonging to large companies.
Although
there are some reasons
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this
situation, some drawbacks
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.
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this
essay will explore problems in the case and how to solve the situation.
Firstly
,
according to
the internet services development, some applications allow people to do micro
businesses
such
as
Uber
eats
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drivers
, AirBnB owners and second hands
sellors
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sellers
.
However
, sometimes
such
micro
businesses
make people unstable workforces.
For example
, workers on
Uber
eats
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are considered small
business
owners, but
actually
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they are day
labors
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.
However
,
Uber
does not provide any social
garantees
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guarantees
.
Therefore
if they face accidents or sickness, they are easily lost their daily wages.
Secondly
, there
are
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some
possiblity
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possibility
that
such
micro
businesses
deprive conventional
businees
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businesses
.
For example
,
Uber
drivers
can supersede taxi
drivers
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drivers'
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business
. One of the solutions for the case is to set some
sunctions
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sanctions
functions
to
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on
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the companies that provide micro
businesses
.
For instance
,
French
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government has banned
Uber
recently because there was a huge
demonstlation
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demonstration
by taxi
drivers
. They complied that
Uber
driver steal their job, and
also
Uber
does not care
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about drivers
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drivers
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drivers'
driver's
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social
garantees
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guarantees
. As
the
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result,
government
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the government
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agrees
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with the opinion of workers,
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and finaly
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finaly
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finally
Uber
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the Uber
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system has been abandoned. It is the same in Japan.
Uber
cannot be allowed in
such
countries. Admittedly,
such
new micro
businesses
are
convenence
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convenient
, but
also
these
business
model
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sometimes became being lack
of
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apply
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labor
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labour
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rights. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, as owners of small
business
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businesses
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tend to be out of
labor
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labour
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rights, governments should support or protect them. Sometimes, companies that provide micro
businesses
should
be
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set some regulations to protect
labors
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labourers
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • financial instability
  • employment benefits
  • health insurance
  • paid leave
  • retirement funds
  • collaborative environment
  • support structures
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • brand establishment
  • client acquisition
  • marketing strategies
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