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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century, and sea levels continue to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this, and what are some possible solutions?

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Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people nowadays, and ocean levels are increasing dramatically. The essay will first suggest that the biggest problems caused by
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 phenomenon are the loss of land and the flooding of homes and
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 argue that pollution reduction and building
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 protection are the most viable solutions. The foremost problems caused by climbing sea levels are that land is being lost and people’s residences are often flooded. As
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 levels rise, low-lying land is submerged and many countries become smaller.
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, millions of people all over the world live in coastal areas, and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they are inundated with
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 and lose their property.
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, the devastation brought about by
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 was clear for all to see during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of people were displaced. Possible solutions to these problems would be to reduce the amount of pollution being created and to build
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 barriers. If each person reduces their carbon footprint, the negative effects on the environment will be reduced and it means that the
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 level will stop rising.
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,
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 defences,
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 as dikes, dams, and floodgates, could be built along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the
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 from reaching populated areas.
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, the Netherlands is one of the most populated areas in the world and
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 one of the most vulnerable to flooding and they have successfully employed various
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 defence systems.
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, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is one of the foremost challenges we face and it will ultimately lead to some countries losing landmass and many of the world’s cities being left underwater, but possible solutions could be to protect our environment and to utilise the
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 prevention techniques already used by countries like Holland.
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Add more specific examples or statistics to strengthen your arguments further.
coherence cohesion
Consider varying sentence structures to maintain the reader's interest.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and engaging introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
You presented a logical structure with main ideas that are developed clearly.
task achievement
Both problems and solutions are effectively addressed and explained.
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