The table below shows consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002.

The table below shows consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002.
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The table compares consumer expenditure on various items in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002. It is noticeable that the proportion of expenditure on food, drinks and tobacco was by far the highest among the five mentioned country
residents
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, the lowest percentage of these
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residents
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residents'
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budget
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allocated
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to
leisure
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activity
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and education. In 2002, 32.14% of
an
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average Turkish
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residents’
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resident’s
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budget
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went on food, drinks and tobacco,
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the equivalent figure for Irish people was about 29.91% of their
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. Italy and Sweden spent less amount of their money on these items than Ireland and Turkey, with 76.36% and 76.36%, respectively.
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, all these
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residents
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allocated only under 10% of their money on closing and footwear. Leisure activities and education accounted for the lowest proportion of Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and
Turkeys
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expenditure. In fact, Spanish citizens only spent 1.98% of their money on leisure activity and education,
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figure for Turkish people was about 4.35%.
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five mentioned countries
residents
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allocated a considerable percentage of their
budget
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on
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food, drinks and tobacco than closing and special activities.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, budget with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • data
  • countries
  • expenditure
  • food
  • drinks
  • tobacco
  • clothing
  • footwear
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • percentage
  • remaining
  • household goods
  • services
  • leisure
  • education
  • varying
  • illustrates
  • varying
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