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Homelessness is a common problem around the world. What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?

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It is generally known the world has homeless people.
However
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, there are some methods to resolve
this
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 issue by governments.
This
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 essay will discuss what solutions can be taken to decrease
this
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 problem.
To begin
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 with, the state should provide jobs for those who are unemployed. By doing
this
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, the part of the population without a job will start having an income, allowing them to pay rent
as well as
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 being able to afford basic needs
such
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 as food, medicine, and clothes.
For instance
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, in a recent quiz made in Uruguay, 80% of the unemployed people that the country was experimenting on 2020, now are working in different areas of agriculture and cattle farms, thanks to the new job opportunities the government offered in that year.
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,
this
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 measure not only helped the individuals who were houseless but
also
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 helped the economy country by having more products being made there
instead
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 of imported.
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, would be really helpful if governments can invest money in the shelters which provide food for the families that are in need. It is commonly known that these places,
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 the lack of income, do not have enough meals for all the individuals who go there.
Although
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 these places are really helpful, they should always have sufficient meals for everyone.
To conclude
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, it is undeniable that homelessness is a matter that happens in all countries.
This
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 essay suggested that some solutions to
this
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 problem are having more job opportunities and providing shelters where people can go and eat.
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