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Teachers are not as important as they used to be because of the choice of other alternatives for students, such as online teaching. To what extent to do you agree of disagree?

#teachers #choice #alternatives #students
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There are some who believe that
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 educational professionals are not essential
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 other resources available better than them in learning.I am of the view that
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 they are necessary for the system by means of proper guidance and corrections, so
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 opinion is highly unacceptable. Primarily, in
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 education system, the teachers are holding a key role in terms of guidance, so that the
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 can go through the right way to achievement. To illustrate, there are different ways to reach
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success , and some of them will not be in proper
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, at that time
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relevant co-ordination is mandatory and
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only a good
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 can direct in
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, a physical presence of a
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 by solving problems and giving short tips.
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 the
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 will remember the occasion and never forget the lesson , which will be fruitful in their life.
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 , the
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 conveys their message to
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 from their experience and examples, which cannot be replaced by any alternative platforms . To explain, they are explaining things from their perspective and understanding of the subject and incidents that happened in their life.
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 it will be more attractive and enjoyable for the
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,so that, they will not get bored
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, a good
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 is a mentor , companion and a good friend
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 some occasions,
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 can exchange their personal and emotional feelings with them,Which cannot be given by other resources. In conclusion,the importance of teachers
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 unavoidable in
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 system, because of
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 of proper
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, giving personal and psychological support can only deliver by a good
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. So I totally disagree with
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological revolution
  • access to information
  • self-learning
  • personalized learning paths
  • learning styles
  • one-size-fits-all approach
  • traditional classrooms
  • flexibility
  • online education
  • commitments
  • social skills
  • emotional intelligence
  • mentorship
  • support
  • blended learning
  • guiding
  • facilitating
  • enhancing
  • quality of education
  • inspire and motivate
  • holistic educational experience
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