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Problem and Solution As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society ?

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Twenty-one century each country's biggest
cities
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 had technological developments and rapid urbanization, which we can observe in many
cities
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.These
cities
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 compared with rural
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 have more facilities and many job opportunities,so the reason most
people
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 stayed most
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 individually or with small family members is because these
cities
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 have many problems
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 as living costs and accommodation problems . In most developing countries many fewer salaries
people
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 live alone in
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 and their relatives stay in villages because very difficult to survive in
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 .Some peoples move from rural areas to
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 with their only small
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 most
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 live in the villages with their big
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 as
families
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 with grandparents.Anyhow
people
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 living with small members have filled alone and they always stay with minimum relationships with neighbours.
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 kind of
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 have fewer social skills and it has bad effects on any society because most
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 always stay under pressure. Another hand most males and females married late or they spent their family life without kids it is a very bad effect on any country because the population growth rate is very less and it is long terms effect on
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 countries, For ,example if new birth rates are very less in
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 20 years in Rome city in Italy so now not sufficient workers in above area and employees need to hire employees from other counties and it happens now many social problems . In ,conclusion urbanization is directly related to
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 living as individuals and small
families
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 and it will give bad effects on our societies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • migration
  • limited living space
  • economic independence
  • nuclear families
  • social norms
  • isolation
  • mental health issues
  • real estate market
  • housing shortages
  • social care
  • extended family networks
  • public provision
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