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Essay topics: An Australian friend is coming to visit you, and it will be his/her birthday during the visit. write a letter to your friend In your letter * say how you feel about the visit * suggest what you could do on his/her birthday *try to find out what you friend thinks of your idea

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Dear Sonali, I am very Glad that you are visiting me after 4 years, it will be a roll coaster meeting for both of us as we are very emotional
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 excited to celebrate your birthday together . I have so many plans , it will be your first visit to Canada so I would like you to visit on your birthday to Niagara Falls one of the most visited tourist destinations after spending a few hours in Niagara we will go to the Shopping near Outlets After that, am planning to book a table in famous buffet restaurant to try exotic foods of different Countries and ending a day with cutting a cake.
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, nowadays you like to binge-watch all tourist videos of different countries am sure you must watch all Canadian tourism if you have made your wishlist to visit any renowned places and cafes . I will wait for your reply. With warm regards, Shivani

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coherence and cohesion
Try to break your ideas into separate paragraphs for better clarity. For instance, have a paragraph for expressing excitement, another for birthday plans, and a final one for checking the friend's thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to enhance the flow and engagement of your writing. Using a mix of simple and compound sentences can help with this.
task achievement
Make sure to check punctuation and capitalization (e.g. 'Glad' should be 'glad') for a more polished presentation.
task achievement
You effectively express your excitement about the visit and the birthday plans, creating a positive tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
The suggestion to visit Niagara Falls and try different foods showcases a thoughtful approach to your friend's birthday celebrations, which adds to the letter's appeal.
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