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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 double line graph depicts how different salaries between the four jobs in the chart. It's clear from the chart the average of working and how to get a high
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 in the UK.
According to
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 what is shown, the average working
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 for police is about 40
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 per week
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 the
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 is 2100£
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 but after three
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 is increasing to 2300£
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 . ,Nurse they are working around 38
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 per week they take 1800£
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 when they started now after three
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 get 1900£
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. So, firefighters work 55
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 per week they get 4000£
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 but after 3
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 they around 4100£
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. Eventually ,the underground driver works for about 36
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 the
salary
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 is 5000£
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 after 3
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 it's increased to 5100£
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 .
To sum up
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 . We could say that the underground drivers work less and get a high
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 , on the other ,hand nurses work more and get less
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 between four jobs .
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, hours, pounds, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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