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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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Some
people
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 support the idea that
universities
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 have to accept the same amount of male and female
students
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. But others think that there is not any difference, and
universities
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 should not be bothered about the genders of their
students
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. It is agreed that there is not any difference between the two sexes in the academic world. Because
people
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 should be accepted to colleges or other educational places
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 their abilities and future purposes towards their careers.
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, I would like to mention that there are professions which are popular specifically among females and males. First and foremost, I concur to think so because if
universities
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 paid their full attention to the gender of the person
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 of their aims and abilities, they would miss the majority of bright minds throughout the world.
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, the majority of males want to work as engineers which is not so popular among females. The same thing happens with the fashion industry. In order to get rid of
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 unnecessary discussions,
people
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 started giving exams. Because in
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 case, it is clear to everyone the amount of knowledge that a person has gained during their school years. It is important because those scores show how hard-working is the person, too. The second reason is the purpose of
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 entering the university. I included
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 because the majority of
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 apply for the university because of their parents' and relatives' wishes. As an example, I have a friend that wants to go to cooking school. but her parents insisted on medical school, and she is going to apply to the university in order to be a healthcare professional.
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, I want to emphasize that the only things that
universities
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 should pay attention to are the scores and motivational letters of their future
students
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. Gender equality in
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 case is not important, at all. It will be unfair towards the
students
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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