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Some scientists believe that in the future computers will be more intelligent than human beings. While some see this as a positive development others worry about the negative consequences.

Some scientists believe that in the future,
computers
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 will become smarter than humans. Many see
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 as a positive step,
while
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 others worry about the negative impacts it may cause. On the positive side, the advanced intelligence of
computers
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 could bring many significant benefits to society.
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smart systems can handle vast amounts of data in a short time, helping people deal with complex problems in medicine, science, and economics.
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, artificial intelligence can help doctors identify diseases more accurately or predict natural disasters, which allows governments to prepare in advance and reduce potential damage.
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, smart
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 can improve
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 productivity and save time on repetitive tasks.
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, many people are afraid that
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 development could lead to serious problems. One of the biggest concerns is job loss as machines replace human workers in many industries.
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, excessive dependence on
computers
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 can weaken independent thinking and social skills, especially among younger generations who grow up using technology daily. Without proper control, technology can
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 be used for harmful purposes. In my opinion, despite the risks, the development of
computers
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 that are smarter than humans is inevitable and brings many benefits. As long as clear laws and ethical standards are established, technology can be managed responsibly to ensure it serves the long-term interests of society.

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task
In task response, the essay gives both sides and a view. To go higher, add a very clear thesis and line up main ideas in order. End with a strong closing sentence that restates your view.
coherence
In coherence, use clear link words and keep close to one idea in each paragraph. Try to have a clear topic sentence for every paragraph.
task
In examples, use more exact, simple facts or events. The samples here are good but need more detail to show how ideas link to the view.
structure
In structure, make a short intro that states what you will talk about, then two body parts, then a clear end.
content
Balanced view across both sides, with a clear final view.
coherence
Good use of linking words like First, In addition, However.
structure
Clear conclusion with your own opinion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • cognitive capabilities
  • technological singularity
  • ethical standards
  • regulatory frameworks
  • personalized services
  • erosion of privacy
  • misuse of AI
  • stringent
  • mitigate
  • advancements
  • dependency
  • efficiently
  • complex problems
  • quality of life
  • significant
  • intelligent AI
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