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The diagram illustrates a technology which is used to produce electricity from wave power.

The diagram illustrates a technology which is used to produce electricity from wave power.
The
contruction
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construction
 of the structure is located on cliff or sea walls areas where, on the edge, the equipment is installed (a chamber, a
comlumn
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column
 with a turbine within). The generation of electricity
consist
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 of two stages. On the first step, waves escalated and
flown
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flew
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 into a chamber (huge
contruction
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construction
 connected to a
column
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) and, within a confined space, air is compressed by a massive water stream which flows inside the
column
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. The rushing water compresses air and injects
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it to
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to
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into
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 the
column
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 which enables the turbine to rotate and generate electricity. The second process is a
vise
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vice
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 versa operation where the outflown amount of water
leave
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leaves
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 a vacuum in the chamber which sucks out air from the
column
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 moving the turbine
on
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in
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 the same clockwise direction.
This
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 non-stop process supplies electricity to consumers.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words column with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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