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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Over the past few decades, there
is
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 a significant
growth
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 in the world. It is a public opinion that,
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for
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 the
country
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's
growth
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, individuals need to pay tariffs.
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 others say that, there are other more important things to do rather than paying
taxes
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. In my opinion, Citizens need to pay
taxes
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 for
better
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the better
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 development of our
country
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.
This
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 disquisition delineates both views and reaches a proper conclusion. To
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 with,
People
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 play an important role in the
growth
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 of a
country
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. Human beings are paying
taxes
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 for single items.
This
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 could be a great contribution to the
country
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.
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,
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 like Europe, New Zealand, and Canada have good transportation,
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Marvelous
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 health care system, Great education support systems, etc.... The authorities of these
countries
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,
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apply
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 collect
taxes
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 from the citizens
according to
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 the amount each person receives.
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,
people
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 in
this
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country
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 are willing to
give
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pay
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taxes
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 because they are happy with the government providing
to
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for
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 the public. If
People
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 are not ready to
give
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pay
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taxes
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taxes,
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 it will affect the
country
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's
growth
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.
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,
In
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in
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 some
countries
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,
The
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the
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 government is not providing basic needs to the citizens even though they are paying tariffs.
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, developing
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 like India
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 are not delivering good public roads or health systems to the
people
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.
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, humans will think before paying
taxes
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. Their priority will change to other matters. To Summarise,
Government
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the Government
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 should ensure that
people
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 are getting their essential things from the authorities. If they are getting
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it correctly
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correctly
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correctly,
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 all
people
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 will be ready to pay
taxes
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which
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, which
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 will be a great contribution to the nation for better development.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly outline each point in a separate paragraph.
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Use more specific examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and punctuation to avoid errors.
task achievement
You presented both views clearly, which is a good approach.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the main points well.
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