Nowadys celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achivements and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disgree with this statement?

Recent years have witnessed a debate about whether

celebrities

'

achievements

are making them famous or whether their

popularity

is measured based on their

wealth

and

glamour

.

While

many youngsters are in demand of support for the latter view, I hold the belief that

celebrities

are more known for their

achievements

. On the one hand,

glamour

and

wealth

are associated factors, making

celebrities

popular among a lot of young generations.

For instance

, one of the Bollywood actors received a gift for a McLaren GT car from his producer which made him India's first owner of

such

a luxurious car. The news got huge attention from the media which was the reason for the influence on many people.

Therefore

, aspirants received a bad

example

by just looking into a person's

wealth

for his

popularity

.

Nevertheless

, one cannot ignore a person's

achievements

for his or her

popularity

.

To begin

with, the well-known celebrity of India, Mr Shahrukh Khan, people admire for his humbleness, hard work and dedication towards his work, and

so

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he survived in his field for the past 40 years

as well as

motivated people all around the world.

In addition

to

this

example

, an Academy

award winner

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actor Mr Matthew McConaughey is another great

example

who became famous because of his

achievements

. He inspired many youngsters through his podcasts, speeches and the best-selling book called Greenlights.

Thus

,

it is clear that

values

such

as

achievements

, hard work, dedication, etc. are more important for a person's

popularity

.

To conclude

,

although

glamour

and

wealth

are playing

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an important role

to establish

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in establishing

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an

example

in young minds, I believe that

celebrities

'

achievements

are contributing

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more to creating a positive

example

for youngsters.

Therefore

, I strongly discourage the statement that

glamour

and

wealth

are the

bases

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basis

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of why

celebrities

are more famous.