In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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vocations

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helps to rejuvenate and refresh your brain. It is believed by some that in future

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will prefer to spend their

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local tourist

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rather than going on international trips. In my

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paragraphs will expand on supporting ideas to explain my viewpoint. There are myriad reasons why

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choose to

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abroad.

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helps them to explore and learn about

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, makeup and clothes which are not available in their local market.Men prefer to take notes of new strategies for

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to grow. Everyone like to taste local foods.Some

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like to

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holy

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in their vocation to refresh their spiritual

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visit

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to perform their religious rituals

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that they try to explore as many

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as they can to learn about them.

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from around the globe

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valley to know about their culture .

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believes

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that enjoying

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abroad will become difficult with

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rates of

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tickets , food and clothes will impact the planning of

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. In order to

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a different country will cost a hefty amount .

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people

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will use that money to take more trips locally

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wasting

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them on an international trip. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that

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economic situation

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abroad contains far more benefits than visiting locally.

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people

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will try to manage

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their finances

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to enjoy their

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

309 words

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