In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

A
well spent
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vocations
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helps to rejuvenate and refresh your brain. It is believed by some that in future
people
will prefer to spend their
holidays
on
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in
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local tourist
places
rather than going on international trips. In my
opinion
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this
will not going to happen .
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paragraphs will expand on supporting ideas to explain my viewpoint. There are myriad reasons why
people
choose to
visit
abroad.
Firstly
,
this
helps them to explore and learn about
a new cultures
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new cultures
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.
people
living in warmer countries
likely
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to stay
at
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in
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colder or snowy
places
. They get opportunities to learn a new language as well.Ladies like to shop
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for jewelry
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jewelry
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, makeup and clothes which are not available in their local market.Men prefer to take notes of new strategies for
business
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businesses
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to grow. Everyone like to taste local foods.Some
people
like to
visit
holy
places
in their vocation to refresh their spiritual
belief
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beliefs
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For instance
, many
people
visit
saudia
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to perform their religious rituals
along with
that they try to explore as many
places
as they can to learn about them.
In addition
to
this
, many
people
from around the globe
comes
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to
visit
the
kalaash
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valley to know about their culture .
On the other hand
, some
people
believes
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that enjoying
holidays
abroad will become difficult with
passing
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time
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.The prime reason can be economic
condition
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conditions
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.
Due to high
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rates of
plan
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plane
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tickets , food and clothes will impact the planning of
holidays
. In order to
visit
a different country will cost a hefty amount .
Consequently
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people
will use that money to take more trips locally
instead
wasting
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of wasting
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them on an international trip. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that
althought
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although
, we can not neglect
economicsituation
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economic situation
.a tour
of
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apply
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abroad contains far more benefits than visiting locally.
Therefore
people
will try to manage
finances
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their finances
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to enjoy their
holidays
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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