some people think that robots are very important to humans future development while others think they are dangerous and have negative effects on society . discuss both views and give your opinion.

Artificial intelligence has been termed "the way of the future" by numerous scientists.
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they are being frowned upon in some continents, humans can't ignore the increasing development of robots in the world.
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both positive and negative effects these creations have in the world and
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, robots are basically created to make life easier for man. We cannot forget the powerful impact that they have in various sectors.
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worth in surgeries as they are more accurate in the separation of muscle and other tissues.
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the good progress these machines have brought, it cannot simply be ignored that they could be weaponized.
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have shown various countries using robots in wars.
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been caught using these intelligent machines as weapons even though it has been denied several times. In my opinion, I believe, even though artificial intelligence has helped humans
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a lot, its negative impacts and setbacks outweigh its good. Though
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its development cannot be stopped or slowed, we can only hope that people realize that they are dangerous before much damage is done to the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • hazardous environments
  • personalized learning
  • job displacement
  • economic inequality
  • social unrest
  • privacy concerns
  • surveillance capabilities
  • malfunction
  • reliance
  • technical failures
  • human skills
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