The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes

less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of

the world during the 1990s.
The pie chart illustrates the main reasons why agricultural
land
becomes less productive. The table describes how these causes affected three regions of
world
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during the 1990s
Overall
, overgrazing in Oceania is the biggest
reason
of
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less productive agricultural lands It is clear from the pie chart that the first
reason
of
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land
degradation is over - cultivation is the
case
with the smallest
percentage
just over a quarter except
other
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minor cases with a tiny fraction.
Then
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reason
is deforestation is quite a higher
percentage
, exactly a
third,
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more than in the
case
above. Now turning to the
last
mentioned
reason
is
over - grazing
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, the
case
with the highest
percentage
than any other reasons
of
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land
degradation,
this
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is five
percent
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more than deforestation
,
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and is seven
percent
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more than
over - culturing
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over-culturing
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.
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case
and with the lowest
percentage
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minor cases that
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chart As can be seen from the table, Europe is rated with the highest
percentage
of degraded agricultural
land
. And Europe
also
had the highest number of deforestation than any other region
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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