Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic social and commercial perspectives and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures.

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them to excel in all areas. They provide their

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go to the best school where the schoolbags are heavier than the

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don't have time to flourish and reveal their hidden talents.

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have many social and commercial

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want to absorb the culture of the whole world

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their elders. After they face

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with their fellow and would like to purchase them. They bring

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not easy.

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from their

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their

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and teachers. They should try to accent

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each child and teach together. The real goal of race should not be to win

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Topic Vocabulary:

academic pressure
globalized world
competitive education system
social media influences
cyberbullying
commercial pressures
aggressive marketing
materialistic desires
peer pressure
high expectations
standardized testing
quantifiable performance
stress and anxiety
extracurricular achievements

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Fully explain your ideas

Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh its drawbacks?

Nowadays, many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep.

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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Each government and authority gave funding to art society; however, some people including me are strongly of the opinion that this is a type of wasting money and it is not profitable action that all social class can use it.