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The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph gives information about the proportions of export from Australia to
Japan
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, the US,
China
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 and India between 1990 and 2012.  
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, the percentage of Australian exports in
China
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 and India witnessed an upward trend
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,
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 the opposite pattern could be observed in the shares of
Japan
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 and the US which decreased slightly.
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,
Japan
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 was the highest result compared with other countries at the beginning of the period, but
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 position was taken over by
China
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.       Turning to details, India’s line was shown as a mere,
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 line wasn’t changed with between 1990 and 2000 which made up approximately 1%.
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,
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 figure rose marginally and was about 7% in 2010, but it went down again until 5%
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 of the span.
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,
China
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also
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 saw an upward pattern, rising significantly from around 3% to well below 30% throughout the time interval.      There was decreased normally in
Japan
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 in
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 list, from roughly 25% to about 16% during the whole span. Regarding the US, there was a fluctuating dynamic, generally, the share of the US,
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 from just above 10% to around 6% over the whole period. 188 words

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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