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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2023 and future projections for 2025.

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2023 and future projections for 2025.
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The chart depicts the
export
 of
the
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Southland on international
tourism
,
dairy
products
 and
meat
products
 in 2000,2023 and future projection for 2025. The units are measured in pounds(each box 1
billion
).
Overall
, in the past
decade
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 international
tourism
as well as
dairy
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the dairy
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 sector
booned
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boomed
booked
while
meat
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the meat
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 production sector has decreased its
export
. In future international
toursim
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tourism
 will grow
where as
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whereas
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dairy
products
 and
meat
 product
export
 are lowering. In the year
2000
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 most of the
export
 by international
tourism
 took around 8
billion
pound
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pounds
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where as
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whereas
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 least amount of
export
 was by
meat
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the meat
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 industry spending around 6
billion
 pounds. In terms of international
tourism
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,tourism
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the
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Southland spent
exaclty
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exactly
 9
billion
pound
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pounds
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where as
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whereas
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10
billion
 by
dairy
products
 and
meat
 industry has spend the lowest around 5.5
billion
pound
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pounds
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 in 2023. In
future
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 it is predicted that the expenditure
of
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on
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 international
tourism
 will be the highest as compared to
dairy
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the dairy
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 and
meat
industry
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industries
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($10
billion
,
aournd
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around
 $9.5
billion
,
$
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and $
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5
billion
 respectively).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, tourism, dairy, products, meat, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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