Nowadays, more individuals are choosing healthier lifestyles given the fact of not consuming animal products, such as, meat or fish. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

It is quite common
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that more and more
people
refuse
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any animal products in order to have
a healthier lifestyles
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a healthier lifestyle
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.
This
trend would create certain benefits but there will
also
be some drawbacks. On the one hand, there are several reasons why having
the
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non-meat diet is beneficial. A common reason is that
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individuals no longer need to kill an animal for just a meal.
Beacause
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Because
of that fact, they would feel peaceful,
delighful
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delightful
and
also
love
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. In
the
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recent years, there was a study of the
vegan
community which show over 12 months
just
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eating beans, vegetables,
mushrooms
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and mushrooms
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, approximately, they could save about hundred of animal species. Another
fator
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factor
can be that consumers may save their budget by not buying any costly meat. They could spend that money on other high
nutritrion
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nutrition
food
such
as nuts, mushrooms, fruits, …
On the other hand
, there are a number of disadvantages of choosing healthier lifestyles that
people
should take into
considertion
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consideration
. One
ovious
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obvious
drawback is that it is much harder for
people
to discover
delicous
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delicious
dishes without animal ingredients
due to
the fact animal soup could create
sweet
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, tasty, and attractive
smell
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. For
examples
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, some
researchs
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research
on the BAB news inform that more than 70̀% of the respondent prefer eating
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meat soup
than
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vegan
soup.
Moreover
, the diversity of dishes of the
vegan
is not as much as the others which means
people
could not combine meat and vegetables to create a meal. In conclusion, choosing healthier lifestyles could bring about certain benefits, but its negative should not be overlooked. In my point of view, being a
vegan
individual can result in more advantages than disadvantages.
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