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public transit play an important role in helping residents and visitors get around large cities. Public transit should be free at all times for those who want to use it. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In big
cities
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traffic
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jams
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 are the major cause that chokes up whole expressways, where the authority is promoting
transport
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services
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 to locals
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 the visitors to use it rather than their own vehicles
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 So that each person can easily travel from
one
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 part of the city to other.
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 with, in developed ,cities the population is rising in a large volume, where it is very difficult for the authority to manage the
traffic
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jams
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. So the ruling government has increased road taxes for the
people
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 who are using their own vehicles and persuading
people
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 to prefer
transport
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services
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.
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, Public
transport
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cost
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 is way lesser than owning a vehicle which is immensely
cost
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-efficient for anyone. Delhi is
one
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 the crowdest metropolis in the world where the authority
have
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 built an interconnected metro system,
due to
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 which each person can travel from
one
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 point of the city to another and the expenditure
of
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 the service is negligible,
due to
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 which
traffic
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jams
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 have reduced by more than 60%. It is an undeniable fact that the
cost
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 of public
transport
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 is excessively less,
due to
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 which it will not affect the government if they would make it free for the Population. There are large numbers of
people
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 who do not have enough money because in large cities
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cost
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 of living is extremely higher.In Japan, bus
services
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 are completely free for everyone and it is
one
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 the smallest country in the world where managing a crowd of cars on the road is very difficult ,
therefore
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 they made bus
services
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 free for everyone,
as a
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result
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traffic
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 have remarkably gone down. In a nutshell,
services
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 provided by the government majorly help the locals so the initiatives of public
transport
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 will make
people
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 easy to travel and if these
services
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 will be provided free of
cost
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then
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then
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 it will significantly reduce the
traffic
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jams
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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