The two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Presented for consideration are two maps highlighting the changes which took place in
an
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agricultural land. From an
overall
perspective,
this
area
showed a tendency to turn into
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a metropolilis
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metropolilis
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metropolis
for tourism purposes. It is clear to observe that many buildings are constructed
to
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village
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the village
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. In the western half of the map, the beach seaside remained untouched but it was extended and improved to develop into
swimming
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a swimming
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area
, trees are not chopped down to keep the
area
green, surrounding them are new
foothpath
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footpath
footpaths
and
housing
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a housing
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area
built in the
vicnity
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vicinity
of the beach.
Furthermore
, in the
past
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there was nothing in the middle of
field
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the field
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, but it was changed by adding many new construction. Following on dining establishments and reception house is built and surround those are lane lead to the new pier in the sea,
moreover
, there is a residential
area
which
evolve
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9 houses for local inhabitants
last
but not least, a bunch of trees
are remained
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unchanged to the east of the map.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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