The two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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Presented for consideration are two maps highlighting the changes which took place in

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agricultural land. From an

overall

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perspective,

this

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area

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showed a tendency to turn into

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a metropolilis

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metropolilis

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metropolis

for tourism purposes. It is clear to observe that many buildings are constructed

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village

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the village

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. In the western half of the map, the beach seaside remained untouched but it was extended and improved to develop into

swimming

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a swimming

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area

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, trees are not chopped down to keep the

area

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green, surrounding them are new

foothpath

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footpath

footpaths

and

housing

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a housing

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area

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built in the

vicnity

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vicinity

of the beach.

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, in the

past

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there was nothing in the middle of

field

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the field

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, but it was changed by adding many new construction. Following on dining establishments and reception house is built and surround those are lane lead to the new pier in the sea,

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, there is a residential

area

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which

evolve

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9 houses for local inhabitants

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but not least, a bunch of trees

are remained

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unchanged to the east of the map.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

165 words

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island
before and after
construction
tourist facilities
maps
changes
comparison
description
implications
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