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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#people #internet #information #access #support
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internet
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people
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depend
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internet
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information
 .The question is, is the
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source
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information
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? .In
this
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adavantages
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advantages
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internet
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a valuable
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valuable information
a piece of valuable information
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information
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people
 . The main reason to support
this
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it can easily
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access
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knowledge from any
source
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 a short period from any place in the world .To illustrate , with
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modern technology
people
 prefer to use a small device which contains the
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Internet
and
this
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people
to
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search
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information
 from their comfort zone .
In other words
, The
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internet
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individuals in
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society
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possibality
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possibility
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positive
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obtaining
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internet
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must be taken into account ,but in
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most of the time can cause several issues
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Firstly
, the
internet
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information
 and some of them are not accurate , so may lead to
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a problem
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For example
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people
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herbal medication without
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 permission from
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side effect and in some certain cases cause death.
To conclude
, we could say that , the
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 and not all sources
in
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internet
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 accurate some
source
 may harm us so,we should be
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aware
about
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 the
source
 of
information
 in order to prevent any problem in the future.
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