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International travel makes people prejudiced rather than broad-minded. What are its causes and what measures can be taken to solve this problem?

#travel #people #measures
It is indisputable that international
tourism
 has taken enormous
measurements
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. International
tourism
 becomes a lot of prejudice rather than broad-minded problems.
This
 essay discusses the solution to
discriminatory
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discrimination
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 rather than broad-minded. The most important reason why opposed to international
tourism
 for
tourists
 by culture,
people
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 they are breaking a rule.
Therefore
 they always raise their heads to
this
 topic. A tourist may not do so or take his shoes inside a temple.
This
 may offend the local
people
. Sometimes young
tourists
 may be attracted
the
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western
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Western
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 culture which the
tourists
 bring with them and many may find
this
 as a threat to the local culture.
Moreover
, the
travelers
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 fiscally
my
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may
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 not be helping the local
people
.
Tourists
 always stay in expensive hotels or entertainment places and enjoy the best facilities. They are a lot of use, the water
that is
 they may be taking two showers a
where as
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 the local
people
 may hotly have enough water to drink.
Traveler
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 always to buying expensive
and
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apply
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things or souvenirs from local artisans. The main reason is that they walk nobody on the beach and have a bad influence on the local population. The
solution
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issolution
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 not simple. We cannot stave off. It is the mainstay of many economies of the world. The tour operator should take the responsibility of guiding the
tourists
 about the conduit things local
people
.
To sum up
, international
tourism
 has a bad side, but many steps can be taken to reduce the harmful result.
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