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Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#religion #schools
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There is a common debate on whether religion should be added to
schools
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' curricula or should be avoided.
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, a religious curriculum may help
students
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 to acquire good manners. I personally believe that religious education can be unfair and might lead to conflicts between
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. some people believe that religious lessons are essential to be taught during school ages.
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 insight is
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 the belief that religion helps children to stay in the right way and gain a good manner for the rest of their life. In Iran,
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, all of the
schools
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 have a lot of compulsory religious classes for children ranging from preschool
students
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 to college
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 to be trained for the purpose of enhancing good character.
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, others believe that these subjects are unnecessary and should be limited as far as possible. Because they believe that ethical lessons should be learned regardless of religious belief. Since in
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 there are different religions and talking about a unit religion results in conflict among
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. To illustrate
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, in Iran, some
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 who are not Muslim are rejected by educators or even other
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. In conclusion,
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 both arguments are merits, I believe that government should not allow
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 to establish religious classes and courses, and each student should only focus on academic subjects and use equal benefits irrespective of their beliefs.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • religious education
  • multi-faith society
  • values and ethics
  • tolerance
  • diversity
  • religious freedom
  • secular education
  • curriculum
  • worldviews
  • interfaith dialogue
  • religious literacy
  • moral guidance
  • cultural understanding
  • critical thinking
  • respect
  • indoctrination
  • religious beliefs
  • secular state
  • religious extremism
  • academic subject
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