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The given maps compare the differences of Youngsville in New Zealand over 25 years starting 1980.

The given maps compare the differences of Youngsville in New Zealand over 25 years starting 1980.
The given maps compare the differences
of
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 Youngsville in New Zealand over 25 years starting
1980
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in 1980
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.
Overall
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,
the
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Youngsville in New Zealand became a modern city thanks to some skyscrapers.
Besides
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, Infrastructure in
this
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 area was expanded to the East-North of the map
during
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 a long period shown. In 1980,
regarding
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the village was on the top of
Alaran
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the Alaran
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river
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River
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.
Residents
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 in
this
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 area gathered to the east
the
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 map.
Moreover
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, there was a lake surrounded by a vast forest, and a hospital was on the left of it. In 2005, the hospital was still the same.
However
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, a part of the forest was chopped down to make
clear
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 way for a park, located at the bottom of the lake, and a parking lot which was to the
northern
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north
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.
Also
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, housing
residents
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 were demolished and replaced by a huge stadium and a parking lot.
In addition
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, a railway was established a long marina which helped transport more
convenient
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conveniently
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.
According to
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 the region
was
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at the bottom of
Alaran
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the Alaran
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river
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River
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, a school, an airport, a parking lot, and a railway remained unchanged after innovation. Trees and housing
residents
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 adjection the school were cut down and converted into industrial buildings.
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,
Woodland
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the Woodland
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 area was replaced by factories, and 4 housing
residents
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 were transformed into skyscrapers next to the railway in the final year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words residents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "differences" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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