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More and more people want to buy famous brands in clothes cars and other items . What are the reasons behind this trend? Do you think it is a positive or negative development

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In the current era, branded
items
 are more popular and it is
trend
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a trend
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 for people who follow their favourite stars. There are reasons who buy famous branded things. I think
this
 has both views which I will explain in detail in the below essay.
Firstly
, wearing brand
items
 become more
fashion
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 in the current generation. In my
view
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,view
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this
 is necessary for the people who want to wear costly products or buy expensive cars.
For instance
, In
India
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,India
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 the University of Osmania did
survey
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a survey
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 on branded and unbranded
items
 who
buy
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from
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in
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last
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 3 years
are
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gradually increased from 10% to 40%.
This
 will increase
economy
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the economy
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 of the top companies and
exporting
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 products from
the
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foreign countries.
However
,
this
 is not good
to
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 people who are in
early
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the early
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 stages of their employment.
On the other hand
, spending most of the money
for
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single
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a single
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 item is not recommended ,
inorder
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in order
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 to buy
such
 things you can save more
in
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on
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 your monthly expenses. Luxury is not
much
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of much
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 importance to
the
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middle-class families like
me
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mine
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. Satisfaction is more than that.
For example
, one of my
friend
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friends
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spend
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lot
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 of money
in
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buying expensive cars, clothes and many. Now he is struggling to survive and selling back all the
items
. So, be happy with the family and don't put much pressure on them. In conclusion, as we follow the trend and if you have much interest
on
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 brands
then
 you can buy the things but up to some extent and not beyond that.
However
,
that is
 their own interest and based on their income . I suggest everyone should think before spending their money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social Status
  • Proliferation
  • Globalization
  • Targeted Advertising
  • Perceived Value
  • Desirability
  • Reliability
  • Peer Pressure
  • Consumer Satisfaction
  • Innovation
  • Competition
  • Excessive Consumerism
  • Social Classes
  • Detract
  • Appreciation
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