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People nowadays tend to have children at older age. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage.

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Nowadays, certain folks prefer to have babies when they are more advanced in
age
.
This
 will enable them to plan and have adequate savings and be mentally fit to cater for their youngsters when they eventually arrive.
Although
,
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 there are some setbacks related to late conceptions, The advent of technology like in vitro fertilization and the use of hormonal therapy to delay menopause has improved the chances of having kids
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at in
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in
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an
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 older
age
.
To begin
 with, having babies before the
age
 of 35 years is of good advantage for
mother
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the mother
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. She will be strong and healthy to go through the stress of normal delivery and have enough time to bond with the family.
On the contrary
, having kids at a younger
age
 with no means of meeting their basic needs and living in poverty is
disadvantage
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,the ability to bond with the family notwithstanding.
For instance
,a client had all her 3 children before she was forty but could not send them
school
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due to
lack
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a lack
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 of
fund
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. They can hardly have three square
meal
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 so education was not a priority.
On the other hand
, it is important to be financially prepared and have a set mind before adding to your responsibilities.
For example
,a couple got married but decided to plan their family. They saved for the future. The woman conceived at the
age
 of 40
year
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 with the aid of in vitro fertilization. She travelled abroad and delivered in one of the best hospitals in
new
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New
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 York. The son has
sice
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since
 graduated from the University. In conclusion,the benefits of having young ones at older
age
outweighs
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 the demerit. Planning
preceeds
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precedes
 success.
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