The pie chart represents the types of careers that Antropology graduates after completing their Bachelor’s degree course from one University. The table displays the wages after five years of working in this particular field.

The pie chart represents the types of careers that Antropology graduates after completing their Bachelor’s degree course from one University. The table displays the wages after five years of working in this particular field.
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The pie chart represents the types of careers that
Antropology
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Anthropology
graduates after completing their Bachelor’s degree course from one University. The table displays the wages after five years of working in
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particular field.
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the chart,
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half of them had chosen to be full-time workers
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having part-time work
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a master’s degree was the least selected.
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, the types of employment that received the highest income of over $75,000 were freelance consultants and the Government sector.
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the chart, full-time work had the highest contribution for slightly over fifty
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there was only 5% of students who decided to work a part-time job and study post-graduation. The part-time job was the second most popular option close to the unemployed for 15% and 12% respectively. Freelance consultants and the government sector had similar
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of income proportion which were a small portion of $25,000-$49,000 and 15% of $50,000-$74,999.
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of both
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had income over $75,000. Private companies had
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different characteristics, the highest percentage of salaries belonged to $50,000-$74,999 for 35% and the least was 10% to $25,000-$49,999.
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