Some believe technology has made our lives too complex and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a belief that digitalization has
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more disruptions in human life and
people
need to lessen the use of
technology
to make their life more peaceful. I completely disagree
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opinion and I will elaborate
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reasons in
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essay. First of all, I believe that the advantages of
technology
give more solutions for problems
facing
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by
human
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in many sectors. The purpose of digitalization is to support modern
people
to finish their jobs on time and it help them to have better accuracy on the final results.
For instance
,
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computers and the internet are two things that we rely on them to
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data and reports for business and study on
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basis,
farmer
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need agriculture machines to help them
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planting and harvesting in order to maximize
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operations.
Thus
, we should continue to use them in our daily life.
Secondly
, digitalization is part of human futuristic movements where
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technophiles will continue to bring more innovations in the next era. A mix-blend of
technology
and
people
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lead
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people
in
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new
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era of business and education, for
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, many companies today start to digitalize their
business
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businesses
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into
start up
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as well as
schools and universities start
long distance
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study programs through the internet and
apps
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platforms.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that using
technology
in
a
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proper ways will
beneficial
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to
citizen
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rather than
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them.
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