Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with a friend. He/She has just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank him/her for the photos and for the holiday ● explain why you didn’t write earlier ● invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear John, I hope you are doing great, I have just seen our photos and I have to admit you are a very talented photographer. The photos are great, so first of all, I want to thank you very much for

this

gift.

Additionally

, I am very grateful because in my opinion photos are the best souvenirs. I am very sorry I did not write earlier, but I had some problems with my computer and my email didn't work properly. I had to wait until my brother was able to help me and fix

this

problem because my technology knowledge was dramatically low. I have a special proposition for you! I want to invite you to visit me here in New York and stay in my place for a

while

. I am sure we will have a great time together,

furthermore

, I have made a list already, so you have no choice. I'm looking forward to hearing from you, and I can't wait when you to visit me. Best Wishes, Derek

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coherence cohesion

Your letter is mostly well-organized, but consider breaking one of your paragraphs into two to clearly separate ideas about the photos and your invitation.

task achievement

While you have addressed all the points effectively, you might want to elaborate a bit more on each point for greater detail.

task achievement

You have a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter.

coherence cohesion

Your letter opens and closes well, with a clear greeting and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

171 words

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