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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages?

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In the present world, people are likely to give
birth
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 to their young one's when they are of
age
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.
Although
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 having
children
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 during old
age
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 might come with some complications, it helps the
parents
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 to be financially and psychologically ready for it, which I believe outweighs the disadvantages as the complications can be corrected with adequate medical intervention.
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, a lack of preparedness can lead to mental damage to both
parents
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 and their
children
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.
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,having
children
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 at later
age
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 helps the parent to prepare for the child both financially and psychologically.They have worked so hard and has enough to meet the need of their
children
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.They are able to spend quality time with their offspring and monitor them appropriately.
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 having kids at later
age
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 comes with some challenges but with adequate medical care it can be corrected.
For instance
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,couples in their early 40’s came to the antenatal clinic.During physical examinations, the result shows that the mother is at risk of high pregnancy which might lead to inter-uterine fetal death.With proper medication and attention,she was able to deliver safely without any problem.
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,young couples who decided to give
birth
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 early without adequate knowledge of what parenting is may find it difficult to take good care of their
children
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.
For example
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, Ade's
parents
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 gave
birth
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 to him in their early 20’s.They find it difficult to take good care of him.They are not able to provide some of his basic needs.
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 prompted Ade to join a bad gang in school.He was later dismissed from school. In conclusion,
parents
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 should be ready both financially and psychologically before giving
birth
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 in order to satisfy their basic needs.Giving
birth
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 in old
age
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 has some complications but with adequate medical intervention, it can be corrected.With these points stated above I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delayed parenting
  • maternal/paternal age
  • biological clock
  • career establishment
  • financial stability
  • physical stamina
  • emotional maturity
  • health risks
  • generation gap
  • work-life balance
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