While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem that we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
People have different views about the
reason
why our world become more and more struggled
. Wrong verb form
struggling
While
some argue that deforestation
become the primary reason
for our environment. I believe that global warming is the fundamental reason
why climate change become deteriorate
.
Generally speaking, there are many Wrong verb form
deteriorating
reason
Change to a plural noun
reasons
will
Correct pronoun usage
that will
affects
Change the verb form
affect
the
environmental issues.
There are various reasons why Correct article usage
apply
deforestation
becomes the majority of problems in the environment. Fiirst
, Correct your spelling
First
deforestation
leads to th
sea level rise because they are not Correct your spelling
the
preventing
the soil when the water Wrong verb form
prevent
come
constantly, and it will make the soil become lost and lost gradually. Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
Secondly
, tree as the wall when flash flood come incidentally, if deforestation
happen
, it will impact Change the verb form
happens
to
the flood in inhabitant’s areas.
In spite of these arguments, I believe that climate change is the main predicament for our environmental issues. Change preposition
apply
Firstly
, many countries use
the
fossil fuel for electricity because it is cheaper and Correct article usage
apply
efficient
rather than green energy which Correct quantifier usage
more efficient
is still develop
nowadays. Change the verb form
is still developed
is still developing
For example
, in the industrial areas, they prefer to use
coal and gas fuel for their machine, meaning it will deduct their production cost so they can sell their products more
affordable Change preposition
at more
price
. When Fix the agreement mistake
prices
in
comes to isolated areas, the society in that place Correct your spelling
it
have
an obstacle to Change the verb form
has
use
electricity, so the government may Wrong verb form
using
use
oil fuel for diesel power plant for them. These diesel generations will produce the danger emission for our air quality. Another reason
is the modern country use
many private transportations specifically fossil transportation rather than public transportation because Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
the
more fossil transportation affects the air quality. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, it all boils down to the
pollution if we can not tackle these two main problems.
To summarize, Correct article usage
apply
although
it might be sensible for deforestation
is the reason
for our environmental issue
, I personally prefer Fix the agreement mistake
issues
the
global warming become the essential Correct determiner usage
that
reason
why our world become worst day by day.Submitted by m.zulnizar on
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