The arts, including art, music and theatre are considered to be important in society Do you think the art still have a place amoungst our modern lifestyles? Should the arts be included in the school curriculum

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It’s believed by some that
art
and fields have become a major part of our
society
.
While
other fields are
great
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importance in
society
,
art
continue
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to play
vital
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role
on
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shaping
the
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culture.
Art
should be incorporated in the school curriculum since
it’s helps
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us to understand
world
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around us, explore
difference
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perspective
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and express
feeling
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and emotions. First of all,it should be pointed out that,the significance of
art
lies in the
fact
that not only does it preserve and save our national heritage,but
also
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our national bond.
Moreover
,the role of
art
should not be underestimated
due to
the
fact
that
art
contribute
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to
economy
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the economy
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of government by attracting tourists
all
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over the world and ceasing the rate of unemployment by offering
work places
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to people.As a matter of
fact
,
the
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recent survey conducted by
British
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journalist revealed that 30%
off
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all job occupations
belongs
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to
art
-related majors. Including the
art
in the curriculum can be considered very essential for several reasons.One of the main justification is that it
encourage
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students to develop their creativity,imagination,self-expression and cognitive skills.
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in
art
can help children to find out their abilities and talents which can boost their self-esteem and nurture
the
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sense of identity and belonging.Since children
ged
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get
involve
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in
art
activities
such
as music and theatre which develop their cooperation skills,and
subsequently
their interpersonal skills are
strengthening
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. To
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up,despite the
fact
that some people in our
society
denies
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significance
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the significance
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of
art
i
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claim that
art
is a way to express ideas which
encourages
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creates creativity and promotes harmony
is
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in
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society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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