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The charts show the sources of electricity produced 4 countries between 2003 and 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuras. and make comparisons where comparisons where relevant

The charts show the sources of electricity produced 4 countries between 2003 and 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuras. and make comparisons where comparisons where relevant
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The given pie charts illustrate the means that four countries, namely
Sweden
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India
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, Morocco and Vietnam used to generate electricity between 2003 and 2008. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that two sources of energy dominate in each country, hydropower and fossil fuel.
However
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,
India
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 and
Sweden
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 have an additional source of electricity, nuclear power. In more detail, Morocco ranks first in the generation of hydropower by a staggering margin of 95% , followed by
Sweden
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 and Vietnam with 52% and 44% respectively,
while
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India
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 accounted for only 14%.
On the other hand
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 ,
India
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 was first in fossil fuel extractions leading by 82% of the total share.
In addition
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 , fossil fuels were the primary source of energy
also
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 in Vietnam, contributing 56%.
On the contrary
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Sweden
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 and Morocco were hardly relying on the extractions since they allocated a mere 4% and 5% respectively .
Last
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 but not least ,nuclear power was responsible for almost half of the electricity production( 44%) in
Sweden
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 ,
whereas
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 in
India
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 comprised only 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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