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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays,people choose to give
birth
 in old
age
 .meanwhile having children at an early
age
 is good but elderly
age
 is better because of the parental readiness, and financial benefits,it
also
 reduces boredom in old
age
.
Although
 it has its demerit but its merits overweight them.These points will be
further
 explained with relevant examples and logical conclusions in the subsequent paragraphs. Preparedness is a key to achievement.Readiness in terms of planning,ways of generating funds, and time.The couples ask themselves the above question? Having kids in old
age
 allows for good offspring and reduces frustration and boredom,it gives room for integrity and love.
For example
, twenty-two years old lady gave
birth
while
 she was still in school,
this
 woman find it difficult to take care of herself and talk less about the pregnancy.By the time she put to ,bed she has nothing to offer for the baby , which led to failure to thrive for the newborn.All
this
 happened simply because she is not ready and had no understanding of the situation she found herself.
Nevertheless
,elderly gravida has its own side effects or complications
such
 as Eclampsia, ectopic,miscarriage,preterm labour,neonatal death‘chromosome abnormalities to mention but a few.But
this
 won’t be a problem if it is attended to immediately after conception .In a null shell there is no problem without a solution is the matter of urgency that determines the stand.so,
this
 shouldn’t be a barrier to old-
age
age
 childbirth
birth
.In ,fact it should be encouraged, because it
also
 reduces boredom late stage of life seeing your children beside you always,
this
 adds to the life spans of couples
also
. In conclusion, giving
birth
 at the late stage of one life has many advantages over its disadvantages,though it has its own bad complications, if it is giving immediate response it is better off because its merit outweighs its demerit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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