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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, humans are monitored in every aspect through advanced technologies like mobile tracking devices and night vision
camera
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.
Although
 these
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 main purpose was to focus on
people
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security
, some feel that they have lost their personal space. I believe the positives of
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 advancement
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 more
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 than its negatives.
To begin
 with, the rate at which
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crimes are being solved nowadays using
these technology
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is quite surprising.
In addition
,
security
 departments state that ninety
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 of child trafficking cases are seemingly solved with the
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 of
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live cameras
in
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 all possible highways and streets of cities and towns. To illustrate, a 10 years old girl in my community was recently kidnapped, on her way back
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home from school. The officer who was investigating
this
 case
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 able to track down the vehicle, the criminals were driving within 6 hours by looking at the
security
 cameras outside the child school campus. In my view, the government should encourage its citizens to enable live cameras on every lane for their own
security
.
In addition
, the government is having a separate department to monitor
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 phone calls, so that they can stop a catastrophic event beforehand.
For example
, In
India
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 there was a recent bomb threat that was about to occur in Mumbai.
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 the daily news
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 that the investigation officers were able to get an insight
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this
 unpleasant event, that was about to occur
while
 they were monitoring
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 suspicious calls.
This
 eventually helped them to give the concerned officials an
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,
thus
 preventing
such
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 event from happening. In conclusion,
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security related
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 technological advancement has significant importance globally, eventually providing a sense of safety for its people. Government can create awareness of the benefits of these technologies to its citizens
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 so that few might come out of the notion that their privacy is being invaded.
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