the chart below indicates the number of people who have heart attacks every year in the US
The chart provides information about the rate of people who are suffering from
heart
attacks
in the US every year. Overall
, the age
groups who tend to have heart
attacks
based on the chart are men
around 45-64 and both genders above 65.
The first age
group appears the least likely to suffer from heart
attacks
. However
, the numbers
of men
diagnosed are drastically higher than women
, in which men
's conditions reached 123 thousand
, whereas
women
were 3 thousand
only. On a similar basis, the following age
group indicated that men
suffer from heart
attacks
more than the double numbers
of women
.
Both genders above 65 showed close numbers
of cases. Nevertheless
, men
's cases are higher than women
's by nearly 1 thousand
, in which men
's numbers
were 440 thousand
, while
women
's 374
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were 374
thousand
.
In short, the numbers
indicated that men
have a higher tendency to get heart
attacks
compared to women
in all age
groups.Submitted by tnteeroo on
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