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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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In today's
world
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 it is common to see that
people
 tend to have their own home
instead
 of renting it. They do that because they take care of their comfort. In
this
 essay I will discuss the reasons for their selection and whether I think it is a positive or negative situation.
To begin
 with, I can suppose that
people
 prefer living in their own houses
due to
 a lot of reasons. The main reason is comfort. Well, it is a quite wide option, but, I mean,
people
 who do not rent a flat are not afraid of being forced to leave their place of living because of a renter who can find a person who will pay them a bigger amount of money. On top of that,
people
 can move furniture in a way
that is
 comfortable for them.
Usually
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 when a person lives in a rented house he is prohibited
to
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 do any changes, I mean, he can not make any renovations. In my view, owning a home has plenty of benefits.
Besides
 comfort, another advantage is safety. If a person lives in a rented house, he has a risk of being stolen by a renter or someone else, because he can not be sure if somebody else,
besides
 the renter, owns keys from a flat. In conclusion, I would like to mention that living in your own house is much better than in a rented one. A lot of
people
 tend to buy
instead
 of rent because of a lot of advantages. I suppose that renting houses will become less popular than nowadays.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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