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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that children are given 100 much free time. They feel har this time should be used to do more school work How do you think children should spend their free time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience, Write at least 250 words

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Children
 are the future of the country. Some have the opinion that
children
 have more available
time
 apart from their studies and work from
school
 and they perceive that
children
 should spend their free on doing more
school
 work, but I believe
otherwise
 because they have to concentrate on other parts of life
such
 as extracurricular
activities
 and ethics from their elders. Extracurricular
activities
, for some
children
, turn out to be the heart of their lives rather than academics.
Activities
 like singing, dancing, and arts sometimes have the greatest impact on pupils as not all of them are good at studies. Exploring as many
activities
 as they can during
school
-going age will help them to find out what they are interested in and what they can be good at as well.
For instance
, a child who is not good in studies but excellent in arts can focus her/his path in that sector. As I said
children
 are the future, and the country's future cannot only depend on
education
 as there are other sectors to concentrate on as well.
Education
 without ethics will not be valued, so ethical
education
 should always be part of childhood, which cannot be taught in
school
 by teachers, but it is best taught by grandparents and parents.
Children
 growing up when facing situations with moral dilemmas
this
 ethical
education
 will help them to take appropriate decisions.
For example
, my younger brother recently wrote an exam at his
school
 for which he did not prepare properly but
instead
 of copying like his friends he wrote what he knew and failed but still, he was feeling good about it as he did not lose his moral ground. It can be concluded that even though some folks believe that
children
 should spend more
time
 on
school
 work during their free
time
 I am against it. They should spend their
time
 on extracurricular
activities
 and ethical
education
 from family.
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