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Some people believe that children are given 100 much free time. They feel har this time should be used to do more school work How do you think children should spend their free time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience,

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Children
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 are the future of the country. Some have the opinion that
children
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 have more available
time
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 apart from their studies and work from
school
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 and they perceive that
children
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 should spend their free on doing more
school
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 work, but I believe
otherwise
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 because they have to concentrate on other parts of life
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 as extracurricular
activities
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 and ethics from their elders. Extracurricular
activities
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, for some
children
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, turn out to be the heart of their lives rather than academics.
Activities
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 like singing, dancing, and arts sometimes have the greatest impact on pupils as not all of them are good at studies. Exploring as many
activities
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 as they can during
school
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-going age will help them to find out what they are interested in and what they can be good at as well.
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, a child who is not good in studies but excellent in arts can focus her/his path in that sector. As I said
children
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 are the future, and the country's future cannot only depend on
education
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 as there are other sectors to concentrate on as well.
Education
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 without ethics will not be valued, so ethical
education
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 should always be part of childhood, which cannot be taught in
school
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 by teachers, but it is best taught by grandparents and parents.
Children
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 growing up when facing situations with moral dilemmas
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 ethical
education
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 will help them to take appropriate decisions.
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, my younger brother recently wrote an exam at his
school
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 for which he did not prepare properly but
instead
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 of copying like his friends he wrote what he knew and failed but still, he was feeling good about it as he did not lose his moral ground. It can be concluded that even though some folks believe that
children
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 should spend more
time
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 on
school
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 work during their free
time
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 I am against it. They should spend their
time
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 on extracurricular
activities
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 and ethical
education
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 from family.

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