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In some countries many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays then in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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Living alone has persistently been a subject of dispute among
people
. More and more
people
 start to live alone in some countries. I reckon that it has both positive and negative sides equally. On the one hand, there are a number of benefits of residing alone.
To begin
 with, It is a good chance for the young to become independent.
People
 who live alone take all responsibility for themselves.
For example
, students studying abroad need to cook meals, clean their homes and pay all bills. It makes them more self-reliant.
In addition
 to
this
, living alone is not only useful for individuals but
also
 for so-called industries. humans inhabiting lonely,
for instance
, need to buy houses. It becomes beneficial for construction companies because it permits them to sell and make money.
On the other hand
,
although
 living alone gives some benefits for
people
, individuals may face several troubles thanks to it.
First,
it makes
people
 not only confident but
also
 it is the key reason for isolation and loneliness. In our fast-paced world, humans face isolation
due to
 living alone. When they are isolated, they feel may consider that they are unnecessary
people
.
Thus
 it affects their mental health.
Furthermore
, housing requires enormous money.
People
 residing alone are responsible for their spending. The cost of living may be a problem for them as living in developed cities is so expensive these days.
To sum up
, even though choosing to live alone have advantages like independence and self-reliance, it may be negative development because of isolation and the cost of living.
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