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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular buildings has changed over time.

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The floorplan shows how a building has changed from 1958 to the present day. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the building has served both commercial and residential purposes with the only area remaining unchanged being the kitchen. At present, the flower shop has a more open layout relative to when it was an apartment and
office
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. In 1958, the building was used as an
office
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 with a meeting
room
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 in the top left
corner
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 of the floorplan, an assistant’s and secretary’s
office
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 below there and a toilet in the bottom left
corner
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. In 1985, the meeting
room
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 was extended and turned into a living
room
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 and a large bathroom and shower took the place of the offices and toilet. The florist shop contained a gift card
room
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 in the top left, a large open space for flowers and a play area in the bottom left
corner
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. On the right side, the kitchen in the top
corner
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 was unaltered across all iterations of the ground floor. In comparison, there was a manager’s
office
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 on the right-hand side and a reception area in the bottom
corner
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. These spaces were allocated for bedrooms in the apartment and are now an
office
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 and additional space for flowers.
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