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People often donot interact with their neighbours and tgis is harming communities. What are the possible causes and solutions.

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Community living is known to be existing since ancient times. It has imperative benefits and a positive impact on individual lives. Unfortunately, in the modern era,
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 trend is dwindling in many societies,
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 the geographical locations are still shared in the form of towns and societies. The rapid rise in the pace of lifestyle usually coincides with the technological outbreak.
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 globalization has made distant relationships closer. With the advent of technology and the emergence of electronic devices like mobile phones and the internet, individuals now like to spend
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 with these technology robots
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 of physical interaction with neighbours.
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, one of the biggest causes is the high competition in studies and highly demanding
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 jobs that have made humans
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 limited.
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 now have less or no
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 to interact with the family living next door.
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, in a rather futuristic era, globalization has made distant relationships closer. With the abundance of resources and facilities, on very few occasions
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 go to their neighbours for some help, or to borrow any household item or commodity.
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, the fast lifestyle has aggravated the depression among the
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 the attitude of the
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 has changed.
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,
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 start their day going to the job and come back very late in the night have no
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 to communicate with each other. As compared to ancient times when there was no technology or jobs that required a hefty amount of individual
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.
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, there is no specific solution at the state level that can help increase the interaction among communities. A possible remedy is to spread awareness programs at the public level through media channels. More vicinity like public parks should be introduced in new societies that can help
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 to interact with the folks living in their streets.
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