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Some people believe that it is a good idea for young people to take a year off to travel or work between high school and university. Others say it is better for students to go straight on to university after graduating from high school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As the world is growing, competition has
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increased and people are being more advanced and modern. Some
group
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 of thinkers believe that young
students
 should travel or work before they attend their universities.
While
 the other group
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says that continuing studies are more beneficial for them.
However
, both have
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 own pros and cons and before commenting
my
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 opinion both
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views will be discussed. Examining the former view, the first and foremost argument to put forward is , when
students
 start working or travelling at an early age, they develop their personality.
For example
, earning
money
 at a small age teaches them the value of
money
,
hence
 improving their spending habits.
In addition
 to
this
,
individual
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 gain more confidence and become more mature. When meeting more people during work or travel will groom their skills like public dealing,
verbal
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 and written communication skill gets polished.
Moreover
, the most important thing is " they start respecting and valuing their parents".
This
 is because that individual understands the meaning of hard work, punctuality and time -commitments. To
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 the latter statement, people always argue that
students
 who start working at an early age often don't attend universities and education is left behind. And all they do is find different ways to make more
money
. In today's world, education is the key , just
money
 is not enough. The reason behind
that is
 when a person is planning to take a promotion, he or she may not get a chance as there might be more qualified
students
 to take their position.
Thus
to conclude
 and give my decision,
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 opine that balancing
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life is more important, as there are
students
 who are working,
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 travelling and studying at the same time and are still generous and successful.
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