Some people believe that it is a good idea for young people to take a year off to travel or work between high school and university. Others say it is better for students to go straight on to university after graduating from high school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

As the world is growing, competition has

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increased and people are being more advanced and modern. Some

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of thinkers believe that young

students

should travel or work before they attend their universities.

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the other group

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says that continuing studies are more beneficial for them.

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, both have

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own pros and cons and before commenting

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views will be discussed. Examining the former view, the first and foremost argument to put forward is , when

students

start working or travelling at an early age, they develop their personality.

For example

, earning

money

at a small age teaches them the value of

money

,

hence

improving their spending habits.

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to

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,

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gain more confidence and become more mature. When meeting more people during work or travel will groom their skills like public dealing,

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and written communication skill gets polished.

Moreover

, the most important thing is " they start respecting and valuing their parents".

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is because that individual understands the meaning of hard work, punctuality and time -commitments. To

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the latter statement, people always argue that

students

who start working at an early age often don't attend universities and education is left behind. And all they do is find different ways to make more

money

. In today's world, education is the key , just

money

is not enough. The reason behind

that is

when a person is planning to take a promotion, he or she may not get a chance as there might be more qualified

students

to take their position.

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to conclude

and give my decision,

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opine that balancing

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life is more important, as there are

students

who are working,

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travelling and studying at the same time and are still generous and successful.