The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950
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The three maps demonstrate the development of a place called West
Park
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Secondary
School
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. They indicate the layout of
this
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school
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in
the
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1950,1980 and 2010, respectively.
It is clear that
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this
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area was more functional in 2010 compared with it
in
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1950. Back in 1950,
this
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place was divided into four parts, houses, farmland, playground, and
school
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.
While
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the
school
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only took a small part of the land, the farmland occupied almost a quarter of the total region. But in 1980, the farmland was replaced by a sportsfield,
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the housing areas were
also
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taken place by a car
park
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and a science block. The two facilities equally shared the land that used to belong to house buildings. In 2010, the most notable change was the expanded car
park
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. It enlarged nearly three times, which caused the disappearance of the old sports field.
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there still has a newly built smaller sports field, which was located beside the playground, caused the playground was downsized to make room for constructing the new sports field.
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, during the sixty years, the West
Park
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Secondary
School
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experienced several changes,
while
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the most visible change was the expansion of the car
park
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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